Leah1597

This just sucked. Period.

Not good at all. I just made a new story, now realizing my old stories were similar to this. It needs more words and a wider range.

Hey I came back to the site and added an actual decent room. Go to the park and click on swing for the new room. :) I'm 14 now, (i was 12 when i first wrote it) so it should be better. :)

Very boring. Kinda weird. Your gonna send me a long, boring, e-mail complaining that I gave one of your ''precious stories'' a 1. Well, whatever. But the story needs more rooms, it needs to be finished, it needs a better plot overall. In fact, it needed to not even become a story. Maybe just a commercial. :P A pathetic, sad commercial.

Only one spelling error (Sqeeling tires?) And the self pity thing got annyoing. But overall, the story, the plot, was great.

Well, simple. This story was trash. Actually, it wasn't even a story. It was some sentences that had pathetic grammer. How old are you, three? Wants some tips for a good story?
1. Go to school and learn proper grammer
2.Actually think of a good plot.
3.Make the pages longer.
4.Don't end the story every time someone picks something.

Overall: It was crap.

Oh how I wish they had a zero....... IT STUNK!! :O Give up having a NICE life!

That. Stunk. Where is a zero on here!??!?

I liked it. but it always said ''now it's time to add to the adventure!'' UGH!

I loved it but whenever i get to a good part, IT STOPS!!!!!! at first it was a 10 but then...
-6 for it ending
+2 for a good plot
-4 for not letting people add on.

this stunk

i can't get to the end!!! help!

i can't get to the end!!!

i loved it!!! it was so funny!!! excpecially he he he she forgot about doughnuts! MUM: And no doughnuts YOU: DOH!

it was ok. barely.