Alejate

I dread to think about Part 2...

Hmm... interesting. I might just add to this some other time.

Worthless.

Seriously, how old are you? I perceive that you're a six-year-old who constantly wets his bed and goes to mommy whenever he has a bad dream. If you're not, then maybe it's just your writing. Go back to school and learn proper English.

Pathetic.

Your life is boring.

You're right, I shouldn't be reading this. Buh-bye.

I agree with jeffisthebest. This story is pointless. I'm giving it a 3 just because I've seen worse in other stories.

Why did I even bother going to this story?... Oh yeah, I was just bored... this is the worst random story I've read so far X-(

Full of potential, im watching out for this

Loved it! Very factual and satirical.

Weird, but for a nonsense story where I can just idea-dump, it's extraordinary.

HILARIOUS! This is the best bad story yet!!!

I'm not giving a 1 because I've already seen worse in other stories. That said, I believe that you should motivate the audience to read your story from the first page. In this case, the first page does not present any premise on what the reader would expect, so that keeps some potential readers away from your story. Say something about the story. Will it be a serious psycho flick or a Halloween comedy? The way it is presented now, I'll just be clicking mindlessly through the links until I find something that catches my interest. Not good.

Ugh. Pointless.

Uhh, right. Weird.

So great! I love it! The events in the story are consistent and are logically altered by the choices that the reader makes. You also get to follow a woman's typical psyche. Great job!

I can't see where this story is going. I failed to finish it because it was sooo booooring. I give it a 2 for an attractive title and story description though.

Why I found this story hilarious and refreshing is a mystery.

What I like about your stories is the fact that they are crazy and appealing (at least to me), and very lighthearted that they won't add to the stress that I've accumulated after a long day's work at the office. Yours aren't the stories that I would read if I'm looking for some intellectual stimulation, but if I'm looking for something that's fun and fresh and relaxing (and yet not stupid and pointless), I'm turning to you. :)

I've been looking around for an infinite story that I would feel very comfortable adding a new room to. A story that is fun and full of possibilities, yet not the usual dumb "one morning, you wake up--" thing. And yeah, I've found the right one in your story. :)

I haven't gone past the first page so I won't rate this story yet. You've given us four names, and asked us to take a pick. How can we make an intelligent decision if we don't know what to base our decisions on? The readers don't know anything about these characters. Will it be a matter of dumb luck then? CYOA readers, I assume, enjoy having to think things through before making a decision. I suppose it'll be better if you give us a little background on these four stooges before you ask us to pick who to date, or whatever.

That was so... dumb. The first choices were pointless (why bother letting us choose Pokemon when the only one we can actually choose is Squirtle... well, I dunno, I haven't tried Pikachu... but still, wtf, you get my point). When there are choices, make sure the reader DOES have a choice, or you miss the point.

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. I love the wit and humor of the story, and I love how you effectively developed the main character from mere audience to a sex god. The consequences made a lot of sense, and you somehow managed to capture a woman's psyche correctly. (I take it you're a man?) Great job, keep 'em cumming!

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. I love the wit and humor of the story, and I love how you effectively developed the main character from mere audience to a sex god. The consequences made a lot of sense, and you somehow managed to capture a woman's psyche correctly. (I take it you're a man?) Great job, keep 'em cumming!