the time machine

Written by richardjacks / G: General Audiences / 2.00 (1 ratings) (1)
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magic
magic		 Nov 28, 2008
Richardjacks, you need to work on capalitizing, periods, question marks, exclamtion points, quotes,hyphens, and aposerothe.

Mext time, if you make another story like what I said, I'll rate it higher.
by magic on Nov 28, 2008

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