Comments & Ratings
|sorry i meant to suggest "kidnapped not kidnaped". Good story.|
Not bad. Great concept - Killing Barney never gets old. |
That said, a few suggestions. One, check the grammar/spelling on a few pages - for instance, "kidnapped" not kidnapped, and "you're fired" not "your fired".
Also, a little more gore would make this story even more awesome.
Pretty good though!
My rating was completely off target..Sorry. 4 is one number less than average and I've rated good stories at the same level...This deserves at most..A 2.|
Erhmm..well...yeahhh...it's a very err..unique story!|
OK I'll cut the bullcrap, the grammar was poor, and the plot was completely random, but I suppose it's good for a kid. With my unique exceptional generosity, I'll give you a 4.
First, let's start you off with a 10.|
-6 for horrible grammar.
-4 for very little humor.
+3 for killing Dora.
"he tells you that barney is a gay pervert and he needs to be killed."|
How old are you?
|The story was interesting to say the least. Whith more than one sentance per room, and better grammar... This could be good.|
|Why I found this story hilarious and refreshing is a mystery.|
Hey, Elmo is awesome. Imma eat you alife. |
Oh, and the substance in my...
Well many things has more substance than this.
Grammar, plot, and more than one sentence rooms please.
|this is perfect, i have always wanted to do this!|