Comments & Ratings
|that is a good story I recommend you adding on to the story and instead of making a paragraph chunk it down to smaller paragraphs|
It may not be MY country from Hell, but once again you've created an elaborate world with a main character who has real emotions.|
I don't know what your inspiration was for this story, but it seems...genuinely inspired. Custia and all.
My thread ended with a kiss from Szil in the cemetery at night. Teehee.
Seriously, though. I enjoyed the sweet ending to the thread I read.
|I liked it alot. The prose is good. Especially on the last page in the 'route' I took. The one with the sunset by the Moses. The general mood of despair and hopelessness and the rampant corruption adds to the hellishness. Reminded me of India at times.|
|Very original and interesting. Good job on this!|
|Profound. This story sets the bar high for future writers. The setting is alive and breathing and is as much a part of the story as the characters themselves. Brilliant work, Ves. Have my babies?|
|Solid story. Creative, original, and well executed.|