Comments & Ratings
||Mar 29, 2010|
||May 19, 2007|
||Feb 12, 2007||That 1 was completely uncalled for. I liked the story.|
||Dec 26, 2006||
"look who came out of the US! Bill Gates and Stephen Hawking!"|
Erm, you clearly haven't read this then:
He isn't American.
||May 13, 2006||You really didn't deserve that one, jeff. This story is pretty good. Not my favorite by far, but good.|
||Feb 4, 2006||
Jesus Christ! Homer This Is a Desgrace!|
I Can't Belive It!MAKE YOUR NEXT STORY BETTER!
||Dec 22, 2005||
I'm not going to rate it yet since you noted that you didn't want to release it so quickly, and it's not complete, etc.|
Anyways, back in the day, before we had authors like donteatpoop and chubbyteletubby, before we all evolved in our writing, I would have given this a 9 but now the bar has been raised so much that today I would probably give it a 7-8. It's not bad but I don't like the overall concept of how it's less like a descriptive story and more like a training course for world domination. But I that's what you were going for. Anyways, it was pretty good.
("The Item" CYOA version was still much better ;))