The Dragon's Final Rage

Written by JPotter / G: General Audiences /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
donteatpoop		Jun 15, 2005	Undoubtedly the best childrens book on the site. Could use a little more discription, but very well written otherwise. Liked the fact that the dragon isn't a bad guy. by donteatpoop on Jun 15, 2005
jamestkirk		Jan 26, 2005	It was an O.k story, and very good for a first, but you need to seperate the dialouge and let us know who's saying what. Other than that it was very good, and such a big vocab! Woo! Ummm, yeah, that's my rating. Write more stories! by jamestkirk on Jan 26, 2005
Karold		Nov 26, 2004	Everything was good enough but one thing exceded my expectations: This story has good character development. This is a rare thing in CYOA stories and I admitt that I don't use as much of it when I write them. The lizard and o'l Jon have conversation and arguements which allows me to see some of each of their traits and get a decent picture of what they rae like. You should make more to this story. by Karold on Nov 26, 2004
Snoopy		Nov 2, 2004	WOW! Go you! I never knew you had such a big vocabulary! You make it sound like someone my age is writing this story! Good Work! You might want to consider tying up the loose ends though. Make a whole bunch of possibilities so that people can keep reading it. Can't wait for more! :-) by Snoopy on Nov 2, 2004
jeffisthebest		Oct 24, 2004	I liked it. Good for a first story. by jeffisthebest on Oct 24, 2004
NCPolice55571		Oct 9, 2004	Very creative, realy a fun story to read especialy if dragons are your taste. It was a fun read I hope to see continuation with the story. A small suggestion I would give is when writing Dialogue I would try and seperate who talking rather than putting everything in one paragraph. It would help to not mix up who is saying what. But otherwise cant wait to read more. by NCPolice55571 on Oct 9, 2004