Arctic Adventure
January 18th-19th, sunny and getting warmer
Dear Diary:
This is my second last day in the Arctic region. I want to find a penguins no "s", "a" means one but today I felt tried "tired" my leg were aching its like I couldn't move. Luckily I had a room full of penguins I was saving it for when I feet "feel" like I cant "can't" walk and this is the day so I went to the room with some penguins so I can learn about the penguins. Firstly I checked the feathers it felt smooth and they have watertight feathers but the skin is scaly and oily but they are always in groups. Then I checked there "their" diet or what they eat but I had no food. so I checked how they swim the penguin when they swim they look like there flying but they are using there flippers as paddles. I didn't want to stay up to "too" late because so I can walked no "ed" tomorrow so I went to bed.
[Marked by Alex 22/02 The grammar is okay, some misspellings, but the biggest problem is that your chapter doesn't make much sense, why would the penguins be in a "room"? Where do you even find "room"s in the Arctic? It's just fields of ice! 6 out of 10]
Dear Diary:
This is my second last day in the Arctic region. I want to find a penguins no "s", "a" means one but today I felt tried "tired" my leg were aching its like I couldn't move. Luckily I had a room full of penguins I was saving it for when I feet "feel" like I cant "can't" walk and this is the day so I went to the room with some penguins so I can learn about the penguins. Firstly I checked the feathers it felt smooth and they have watertight feathers but the skin is scaly and oily but they are always in groups. Then I checked there "their" diet or what they eat but I had no food. so I checked how they swim the penguin when they swim they look like there flying but they are using there flippers as paddles. I didn't want to stay up to "too" late because so I can walked no "ed" tomorrow so I went to bed.
[Marked by Alex 22/02 The grammar is okay, some misspellings, but the biggest problem is that your chapter doesn't make much sense, why would the penguins be in a "room"? Where do you even find "room"s in the Arctic? It's just fields of ice! 6 out of 10]