Arctic Adventure
January 4th-5th, storm and cloudy
Dear Diary:
Today was another normal day researching and learning about the wonderful creatures in the Arctic region. Today I was wanting to find a polar bears no "s" because you used "a" before it because I haven't seen one yet so I went to the edge the edge of what? where there is water and ice. Once I got there I started to look around then I found a small breathing hole like try not to use words such as "like" and "sort of" in your writing, they're a bit too casual and a big one. Then I trip over something and it was a polar bear It was starting to open his mouth and started to come closer. I thought it will eat me but nooo just "no" is usually enough, sometimes in dialogue (people talking) you can use more "o"s if the person is yelling or joking it was trying to lick me because I think it was think I was a cub because I was wear white clothes. So followed it into his den and saw the bigger hole is the entrance and the small one is the breathing hole. Then I saw a flash in the sky and I knew it ill be a storm so I went back to the small house I research and sleep in It started to storm and thunder so I ran as fast as I could to my research house.
I got to bed because I was scared.
[Marked by Alex 22/02 Good story progression (it was so cool that the bear thought you were a cub!) but this chapter would be better if it was a bit longer. 6 out of 10]
Dear Diary:
Today was another normal day researching and learning about the wonderful creatures in the Arctic region. Today I was wanting to find a polar bears no "s" because you used "a" before it because I haven't seen one yet so I went to the edge the edge of what? where there is water and ice. Once I got there I started to look around then I found a small breathing hole like try not to use words such as "like" and "sort of" in your writing, they're a bit too casual and a big one. Then I trip over something and it was a polar bear It was starting to open his mouth and started to come closer. I thought it will eat me but nooo just "no" is usually enough, sometimes in dialogue (people talking) you can use more "o"s if the person is yelling or joking it was trying to lick me because I think it was think I was a cub because I was wear white clothes. So followed it into his den and saw the bigger hole is the entrance and the small one is the breathing hole. Then I saw a flash in the sky and I knew it ill be a storm so I went back to the small house I research and sleep in It started to storm and thunder so I ran as fast as I could to my research house.
I got to bed because I was scared.
[Marked by Alex 22/02 Good story progression (it was so cool that the bear thought you were a cub!) but this chapter would be better if it was a bit longer. 6 out of 10]