spartan008

Can't give it too high of a rating since its not finished, but it did have a little potential I suppose. Heres how I broke it down.

Started off with a 10
-2 for grammer errors. (lots of them)
-2 for lack of detail.

Keep writing and improving =)

I thought this was a pretty good story for the site. Wya better than some of the crap on here. Keep up the good work :)

Total crap. Too many choices resulted in death. Theres also another thing called DETAIL that would be nice to see SOMEWHERE in the story! The only reason i give you a 2 is because i found the Hp beginning a little funny...

This was the first story i read when i came to this site. I loved it then and i love it now. 10!!!

This story has potential ;however, it does have several flaws. One of the major things i saw was when you choose to start as Toleron. Out of 5 possible choices, 4 of them would result in your death. I would have liked to have seen a little more variety, but this is still a decent story.

Wow, this was a great story and it was really enjoyable to play through. Nice work EndMaster.

Great story.

it was funny however not enough detail

i liked this story. it caught my attention and i wanted to see what every choice was like. good job.

i thought it was a good story. if you added just a little more polish to it i would have given it a 10

GREAT STORY!!!

what was the purpose of this story?? this has got to be one of the most boring things i have ever read. come on drums you can do better.

Great story. i really enjoyed it.

I must say that when i saw a Zelda story i knew i had to read it. Being a Zelda story alone gives it extremely high standards.

I am sorry but i am going to have to give you a 2. You had alot of only 1 choice options and that makes the story less...interactive. You also didnt hardly write enough to detail anything that was happening...sorry

The story also seems to follow the same patternt the video game does and for anyone who has ever played it, it becomes old fast.

Give more time and more details to your work. You might want to try writing something easier. Zelda has high standards.