Dan2

Need lesser choice

I liked it.

He may have helped to cripple our nation more than any president has ever hoped to do before, but man did he have personality doing it.

This is a really cool story! I appreciate the level of detail on every page. Really shows that the author cares about this story and it makes it much more interesting to read.

For a prologue it's not bad.

Lame and diminutive.

horrible.story.boboxbar.

While many doors do hold very exceptional stories, I feel that while this was a great idea to start with, the vast majority of this story is sloppily written and not very creative. Of course it always has the opportunity to get better, but this is definitely a story that needs periodic clean ups.

It's aight.

Lol, even though I haven't really ever cared for pokemon stories..I like the concept you have of battling.

Seems decent..

Nice pics tho

Dude cmon...I can tell you could write better than this if you just put some effort into it.

well, this coulda been better..

Wow, this story basically sucks..

Wow, Bob has quite the life doesn't he.

It's really a shame that Cat didn't continue this. It had real potential.

I'm not one for maze stories but I'd say yours was about average.

You set up your stories the same way I like to set up mine. Many paths open for possibility and the story can take any turn it wants into fiction, horror, fantasy, anything. But the way it's created the rooms are all pretty much logical and they make sense.

Great Job

I have to give you credit for the amount of patience it must've taken to write this. Repeating the same rooms over and over with different items....sheesh.

Nice idea. Probably would've rated higher if I hadn't already seen this demonstrated before.

YAWN. Boring story. This isn't even the life of an average person, it's the life of a very dull person.

Yeah, the actual games are definitely better. You probably should have created your own Jake stories, at least that would have been more interesting. But the way you change around writing tenses is so confusing it pretty much makes this story one that most are just going to give up on.

Average story for people to goof around in.

Didn't even have to go through more than 3 rooms before I realized this was a simple cut-and-paste IS version of that annoying flash game.

As for the rest of you, I can't believe you actually read it through, LOL

Great story if you like cars. Needs more work though.

Well, thanks for all the endings and the one right choice with every room. Really clever.

Not anything new or original but...

okay. No real spelling errors, which is good.

...Whatever

Good story. Doesn't get very far though.

Not as brilliant as your other story.

Sort of funny. Only one beginning choice though. That's just not cool.

Well, it is a classic.

....

Idk

...Creative?

Great story. Mana is sort of hard to understand and could use a bit more detail. Other than that, it's really well done.

Cool

Wow, you actually found some guy named BillthePony to add to your shitty story. Too bad it still sucks beyond belief.

PS: You're going to hell for this.

I would write an awful review about this story, but considering the odds you'll probably already have committed suicide over your pathetic life before you'll ever be able to read this.

Yeah, and that made about as much sense as your suckalicious story.

Dude....

how old are you??

Excellent story. Keep writing!

uhh, are you a bich?

Wait...what's the point of this?

Well he doesn't seem to be worried about changing into a girl for no reason that much does he?

Cool story and fun new idea.

Awesome story, especially since the adventure doesn't end at the medieval time. You can also go on to explore prehistoric times, WWII, and the Wild West. This story was written about three years ago and it still has much potential.

Very good romance story. You don't see too many of these.

Funny story.

It was good. Some of the twists I thought were a little too obvious though especially the one at the end. The riddles were cool but it didn't make much sense why kids would be asking you riddles while there is killing and slaughtering going on in the school.

This story is awesome!!!!!!!!

Really good, but please continue working on it!