Storywriter

Lousy drivel.

Pretty gay.

This story is good for a laugh. If you understand the humor, it's really quite cute. I am aurprised at some of the low ratings. While some stories such as this are puerille, this one seemed to have that creative spark that made it something other than the gutter ball people made it out to be. You made me laugh more than once. Seven out of ten.

Lacks adequate description. Too easy. Boring.

Purile.

I think the key to good writing goes back to third grade show and tell. In this case you do a lot of telling, and hardly any showing. Show us how these people feel and what they do. Don't just tell us.

I just couldn't give a one.