TheKoolAidGuy

If this wasn't one of the first stories (I actually think it was the first) to be posted on the site, it would be a 1. I think it's shit.

AAaand, for the record: I have written ONE room in this story. And it wasn't even the first room. Don't even know which one it was...

So don't blame me. It sucks. Yes. Get over it.

I'm surprised I like this story so much, to be honest. But it's great fun if you're wanting something light-hearted. And I only fucked up about three times. One of them being the cutlery tower landing on me...

I enjoyed it. Reminds me of another book I once read, but I can't remember what it was. It had nothing to do with Ninjas. Just the style of writing, I guess.

Not that that helps you in any way. JUst thought I'd say.

I really love the idea, it's really good and original. I also particularly enjoyed reading the description of Fred when all the colours appeared etc, that was excellent. The only critisisms that I have are:-

The laid-back writing style is not always totally effective.

AND

You capitalize too many words. Sorry, it just slightly irritates me. It also adds to the laid-back writing style.

Other than that, great job. I look forward to reading some more.

I would have prefered 6.5 because I'm fussy, but I'm also feeling generous today, so enjoy your seven!

It's a pretty good story, I guess. Cliched and cheesy, and the repetition gets slightly irritating, but it;s still pretty good. I like the idea as well. More commas or periods needed, otherwise reading becomes a drag. You should be able to read it aloud without hyperventillating.

I really dislike this story, and always have. The only reason I gave you a 2 and not a 1 is because this half inspired me to write "Diamonds are Expensive". Don't worry, I'd already thought of the idea before I read this, I'm not ripping you off.

Haha. That was pretty good. I was worried it was going to be full of jokes against GWB's intelligence (omg george bush is so stooid hes gonna destroy us all lol @ him!!!!1) but it wasn't. Good job.

My favourite story on this website. Kudos.

Hmm... It's a shame you spoiled your story with rape. It was looking good. Not a very original idea, I must say, but your writing style wasn't too bad. It could have gone somewhere.

Haha! Nice and original, I must say.I got the feeling that it would loop after a few verses, and then...

Great story. It was one of the first I ever read. But I do have to critisize the fact that there is very little description in the rooms.

I've always loved this story! Nice one, Ender!

I'm sorry, but this is a REALLY terrible story. I didn't give it a 1 or a two because it's not quite as bad as some of your other stories and you used sentences (unlike most your stories)