Arctic Adventure
December 14th-15th, slight rain and ice
Dear Diary:
Today I woke up excited for what I will find. I got out of bed and opened the door, I slammed the door and ran to the middle of nowhere. While I was out of breath I saw lost of big foot steps "footsteps" so I followed it. The minutes felt like hours excellent phrase! and my legs were about to fall off but suddenly I saw a brown glimpse of something it seemed like it was move so I reckoned it was a "an" animal so I decide to investigated once I got close up to it I so "saw" two tusks and fur to keep them warm. I followed it until a predators no "s" came and some thing wired "weird" started to happen they started to huddle up and put there "their" butts together.
I walked back to the research station studied it then I its was called it was called mush "musk" oxen they search in groups, they are herbivores (plant eater), when predators come they huddle and put there "their" butts and there heads out so when the predators come and try to attack it will hit the tusks.
Today was great because I saw real predators predators eat meat! these are actually "prey" and how they huddle. What will I see nexted it's just "next", nexted is not a word.
[Marked by Alex 22/02 Good follow-up to your adventure, I especially liked the slow reveal of information for the reader, keeping them guessing what the animal was until you explained more later on. Some small spelling errors (look for the red corrections in the paragraph) 8 out of 10]
Dear Diary:
Today I woke up excited for what I will find. I got out of bed and opened the door, I slammed the door and ran to the middle of nowhere. While I was out of breath I saw lost of big foot steps "footsteps" so I followed it. The minutes felt like hours excellent phrase! and my legs were about to fall off but suddenly I saw a brown glimpse of something it seemed like it was move so I reckoned it was a "an" animal so I decide to investigated once I got close up to it I so "saw" two tusks and fur to keep them warm. I followed it until a predators no "s" came and some thing wired "weird" started to happen they started to huddle up and put there "their" butts together.
I walked back to the research station studied it then I its was called it was called mush "musk" oxen they search in groups, they are herbivores (plant eater), when predators come they huddle and put there "their" butts and there heads out so when the predators come and try to attack it will hit the tusks.
Today was great because I saw real predators predators eat meat! these are actually "prey" and how they huddle. What will I see nexted it's just "next", nexted is not a word.
[Marked by Alex 22/02 Good follow-up to your adventure, I especially liked the slow reveal of information for the reader, keeping them guessing what the animal was until you explained more later on. Some small spelling errors (look for the red corrections in the paragraph) 8 out of 10]