Life of Insanity

Written by MiNdLeSs96 / NR: Not Rated / 8.50 (4 ratings) (4)
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YazZMaN
YazZMaN		 Jul 3, 2005
Wow, you had a great starting idea and I love your your style. I do think you should make paragraphs though. Nice pics too ;) I'd like to see another story from you.
by YazZMaN on Jul 3, 2005
Ihaveissues96
Ihaveissues96		 Jul 16, 2004
Great story, I loved the pictures! I agree with NC though, you kind of dropped the strong detail after the first page. Keep it up!
by Ihaveissues96 on Jul 16, 2004
Speck
Speck		 Jun 26, 2004
It's gonna' be good when it's complete. I'm sure of it. Creepy pics BTW.
by Speck on Jun 26, 2004
NCPolice55571
NCPolice55571		 Jun 16, 2004
really like the idea of the story, hope you keep on with it, the images help to really set it up. The begining of the story was the best part the image you get while reading it was great and help set the mood for the story.

A helpful comment that i would give would be not to apologize for writing alot in the first page and to break up the paragraph into a couple of paragraphs so it wont seem too long and help the story flow.

And mostly I would to have liked to read the great descriptive detail carried from the first page over to the other pages. You can see you have the ability to write a scary story but after the first page you kinda let the reader down from the great detail that was given in the first page.
Overall it was great.(loved the pics)
by NCPolice55571 on Jun 16, 2004

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