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You are a Cockroach

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Author Rating Date Comment
Usoki
Usoki
Apr 4, 2006
I was kinda expecting more "Metamorphosis" references, personally. So, I put one in. I feel better now, at least.

The idea is rather amusing...but the animal you get turned into could be funnier. And, like someone else said...it doesn't try to be funny.
by Usoki on Apr 4, 2006
YazZMaN
YazZMaN
Mar 22, 2006
I pretty much agree with what everybody else said. For a first story, it owns. I know.
by YazZMaN on Mar 22, 2006
donteatpoop
donteatpoop
Feb 9, 2006
Can't believe I never bothered to rate this before. Good story. I always die, but the basic premis of the story is good. I've never played the game you based it on, but unlike a lot of the other game/tv show inpired ideas on here, you don't have to understand the game to understand what's going on. Before you mentioned the game I figured it was a play on the Metamorphosis (I'm sure I mispelled that).

Only one thing was lacking in your story, and this can easily be remedied by using that edit button at the bottom of the rooms; it needs more description. Physical and emotional description. Just saying you're afraid isn't enough, make the reader afraid.

That's my 5 cents anyway. (Yes I give more than double the two cents most give. Im a generous guy.)
by donteatpoop on Feb 9, 2006
ChubbyTeletubby
ChubbyTeletubby
Jul 11, 2005
Decent premise, but the story fails to deliver completely. Still, you have some writing talent. Keep at it.
by ChubbyTeletubby on Jul 11, 2005
splapped
splapped
Apr 16, 2005
by splapped on Apr 16, 2005
jeffisthebest
jeffisthebest
Oct 26, 2004
I give this a six because it is a humor story but doesn't even make an attempt at being funny.
by jeffisthebest on Oct 26, 2004
NCPolice55571
NCPolice55571
Jun 12, 2004
It's a fun original story from the view of a cock roach.
by NCPolice55571 on Jun 12, 2004
MagicPen
MagicPen
May 12, 2004
Very original, but limited plot.
by MagicPen on May 12, 2004
ShannonK
ShannonK
Apr 25, 2004
Voting for my own story. I'm pathetic. But, c'mon... it'll be GREAT once there's more writers than me!!!
by ShannonK on Apr 25, 2004
ShannonK
ShannonK
Apr 25, 2004
Seriously, people. You're looking through it. Come up with a short, sweet, funny page. I'm not asking for much, here!!!

C'mon. Try it out. How often do you get to be a cockroach?
by ShannonK on Apr 25, 2004

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