Robbers of the Dead

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Author Rating Date Comment
d3r3113
d3r3113
May 5, 2020
cool
by d3r3113 on May 5, 2020
Calen
Calen
Dec 31, 2008
There's not much to say.

A. The fact that you're blinded (literally) by a pyramid would cause it to be a major health hazard to anyone who happened to walk by.

B. The rooms are often too short.

C. The story doesn't progress with much plot.

On the up side, it is a good idea and you executed it fairly well, but it needs a lot of improvement.

MY REVIEW ENDS HERE.
by Calen on Dec 31, 2008
Leblanc4prez
Leblanc4prez
Jun 17, 2007
A resonable story.
by Leblanc4prez on Jun 17, 2007
donteatpoop
donteatpoop
Dec 12, 2005
Not terrible, but I did read some things that bothered me a little. For instance, on the first page why would you have the option of what time of day you choose to rob the place if one of them is going to immediatley end anyway? That's just stupid. Then when choose to go at night, the picture of the pyramid is clearly a daytime picture. If you're going to do shit like that, don't put a picture in. Those were right in the beginning, so it was a bit of a struggle for me to get into the story. While the premise is promising, the story delivers it in short rooms and abrupt endings. Not my cup of tea,
by donteatpoop on Dec 12, 2005
michaelrayholt
michaelrayholt
Aug 4, 2005
Starts off really well, but the remaining rooms are way too short. Check your spelling, too.
by michaelrayholt on Aug 4, 2005
Karold
Karold
Nov 19, 2004
You are very imformative on pyramid history in the begining (nice!) and the stroy is also fully completed (something I have come to largely respect). However, the rooms were quite short, there weren't quite enough exciting things, and you lose just because it's daytime???
by Karold on Nov 19, 2004
Shabti
Shabti
Apr 5, 2004
Excellent story!
by Shabti on Apr 5, 2004
Rampage57
Rampage57
Mar 15, 2004
by Rampage57 on Mar 15, 2004

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