heartbroken.....................

Written by guesshoo / NR: Not Rated / 7.67 (3 ratings) (3)
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TheCandyMan
TheCandyMan		 Aug 29, 2011
You possess great styles of writing. The only flaws was the actual storyline - not good. I should be able to empathise. Yet - I wouldn't even be bothered by the protagonist's death. I'm actually given the choice for the woman to pleasure herself, fantasising about her long lost lover. Yet - it lacks so much detail, so much description that could have been applied. You have a whole load of potential here, though.
by TheCandyMan on Aug 29, 2011
Victoria7
Victoria7		 Jul 8, 2004
by Victoria7 on Jul 8, 2004
CelticFrostQueen
CelticFrostQueen		 Jan 31, 2004
Looks good so far. The only reason I haven't rated it higher is because it is still so new with few choices. But your writing style so far is very good :) Can't wait to see more.
by CelticFrostQueen on Jan 31, 2004

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