the dblack guy turnd white

Written by Ghizzard / MA: Mature Audiences - Adult / 1.00 (1 ratings) (1)
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TheCandyMan
TheCandyMan		 Jul 23, 2011
Is this thing a joke..Seriously? What the fuck is this? This is to the standards of an eight year old. What the hell were you attempting or even thinking here? "the dblack guy turnd white." Nice title dude, this is a really smooth, attractive 'story' right here.
This contains no coherent plotline, no grammar, shit spelling, and just one sentence on every page. Go try to get this published.

Then there's your Statistics:

mj is a fukin legand for hangin the baby out the window.. lol i love mj and his music and he died coz you dik heads made him like a peedo but hes just a sexuly fustrated mna who like little boys and girls.. no wait just boys If you're wondering why this is so weird/disturbing/filled with bad spelling and grammar, I wrote it with my friend and he did most of the work so yeah.

Just to be a little..Uh..Technical here, when you say MJ, it's obvious you mean Michael Jackson. I suppose that that message was readable. Yet, Michael Jackson was married twice. Sexually frustrated? Are you kidding me? He had two children. And nobody cares if you wrote this with your friend or not, you could've at least corrected the title. I suppose that this rating is directed at him...:


Forget about writing.
by TheCandyMan on Jul 23, 2011

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