Comments & Ratings
Good work. It's probably the best zombie story I've read here so far. |
My reinforcing feedback is that I liked its completeness and the story have a strong internal logic. My constructive feedback is to flesh out (pardon me) the other characters a bit more and establish the setting some.
Still, well done overall.
|I feel like such a noob XD|
|Thank you all for great feedback!|
Finished it- got every ending!|
Love how hard it is to die. Good zombie story. Some of the pages didn't match up to the plot that happened before it though. Might have been better executed on chooseyourstory.com with its variables.
This is good. I mean the potential for this story is limitless! I enjoy the fact that so far, you've stuck to your word about having death be something that won't happen immediately after making a choice. I personally think its sort of suspenseful, especially since you've added in a morality system that has me constantly doubting myself (to go to the house, or not to go to the house...). |
If I can offer any sort of critique, it'd be personal, menial things like fleshing out more detail in your story, making it harder to just shoot a teammate. I know you probably weren't taking characterization into consideration when making this but if you ever do something like this in the future, making believable characters will earn you a ton of comments and inspiration to keep on writing.
I'd also like to see a more 'gamebook' feel to this. Perhaps a morality bar when we are given a reward so we know where we stand with our teammates?
All in all, solid piece of work, you squishy demon!
|I like it. It's not finished but it's not your usual zombie story, and I like the hard to die part.|
|Thank you all for your great feed back!|
|It managed to hold my attention and I think there's a lot of potential here, but it's still pretty bare bones (no real detail at all in descriptions, and at the moment you eventually wind up at the same place no matter what you pick) and it's hard to rate it at this stage. Looking forward to seeing where you go with this if you do wind up expanding it though.|
|I like it :) lawl|