Viral Story

Written by Sunny / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested / 6.00 (1 ratings) (1)
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YazZMaN
YazZMaN		 Jan 11, 2011
Your grammar is really good, and the plot was very clean and self-contained. On the downside though, most of the choices have obvious consequences (except for the flu shot one!) and the subject matter just didn't interest me.

If you made a more ambitious story that was longer and had more detail with well-defined characters, I think it would probably be really sweet.

Anyway, here's a 6.

Oh, and I found the "dot-loop room" extremely amusing for some reason.
by YazZMaN on Jan 11, 2011

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