Comments & Ratings
|pretty good though i feel you could have tried too make it seem more realistic not criticizing just trying to help.|
Great story, for what it is. Great blend of pictures and yes, even actual WORDS.|
Masterful use of the English language, even. My two favorite lines in the story?
"Mmmmmm....Zavier, I want to feel every inch of your muscularity."
"Thrust your hardness deep into me Zavier. I want to feel you."
HA! Oh, man. Classic. Absolutely classic. Love it.
|Not a bad story, but some of the writing that people put into it was of poor quality. You should edit the story to make these poorly written rooms less painful to read. The other problem I found in the story (which resulted in the low rating) is that the dialogue seemed so forced and unrealistic. Nice story idea though, and I hope you come back to the site and work on it some more. Word to your mother.|
|Great story, great pics used. The story is one of the best I've read.|
|Very nice graphics! This is one of the best stories I've played!|