"The Dragon's Last Breath"

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Author Rating Date Comment
DanielHS11
DanielHS11
Oct 5, 2019
by DanielHS11 on Oct 5, 2019
Corgi289
Corgi289
Aug 31, 2019
This could be better. Although its not bad you could still go through and fix some of the spelling errors. Such as "safty" as opposed to safety, and "except" which should be accept.
by Corgi289 on Aug 31, 2019
PotatoCaptain
PotatoCaptain
Jul 25, 2019
Pretty good, much better than my stories (I didn’t even bother trying to make my stories good)
by PotatoCaptain on Jul 25, 2019
Dameon
Dameon
Sep 26, 2018
pretty good though i feel you could have tried too make it seem more realistic not criticizing just trying to help.
by Dameon on Sep 26, 2018
jp33
jp33
Apr 12, 2006
by jp33 on Apr 12, 2006
ChubbyTeletubby
ChubbyTeletubby
Apr 11, 2006
Great story, for what it is. Great blend of pictures and yes, even actual WORDS.

Masterful use of the English language, even. My two favorite lines in the story?

"Mmmmmm....Zavier, I want to feel every inch of your muscularity."

And...

"Thrust your hardness deep into me Zavier. I want to feel you."

HA! Oh, man. Classic. Absolutely classic. Love it.

Great job.
by ChubbyTeletubby on Apr 11, 2006
donteatpoop
donteatpoop
Aug 2, 2005
Not a bad story, but some of the writing that people put into it was of poor quality. You should edit the story to make these poorly written rooms less painful to read. The other problem I found in the story (which resulted in the low rating) is that the dialogue seemed so forced and unrealistic. Nice story idea though, and I hope you come back to the site and work on it some more. Word to your mother.
by donteatpoop on Aug 2, 2005
NCPolice55571
NCPolice55571
Sep 27, 2004
Great story, great pics used. The story is one of the best I've read.
by NCPolice55571 on Sep 27, 2004
Ziff26966
Ziff26966
Aug 11, 2004
by Ziff26966 on Aug 11, 2004
Max143
Max143
Jul 30, 2004
Very nice graphics! This is one of the best stories I've played!
by Max143 on Jul 30, 2004

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