.44 Magnum

Written by TravisLarkin / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested / 6.25 (4 ratings) (4)
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RussA
RussA		 Jun 1, 2019
by RussA on Jun 1, 2019
Thickskullman
Thickskullman		 May 18, 2013
Ok, but very short and too many duplicate pages.
by Thickskullman on May 18, 2013
Clark
Clark		 Mar 7, 2013
A lot of fun. How about a sequel?
by Clark on Mar 7, 2013
YazZMaN
YazZMaN		 Apr 19, 2010
Unfortunately I'm so busy I could only read about 5 or 6 rooms, but it looks really good so far. There weren't many spelling errors and you kept the story going at a good pace.

I'd recommend breaking up your writing into paragraphs (just hit "enter" twice) and shortening down the words included in the choice links, but this is good stuff.
by YazZMaN on Apr 19, 2010

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