Hey..not bad. I can't exactly give you one flaw, except for the details of the environment, but that's fine because you can visualise it anyway. I can't think of anything bad to give you. Except of course, the fact that it isn't finished. You can't make a story with 93 rooms, only to leave it unfinished. That's one of the only likely problems with this story, I believe this deserves at most, a 7. Nice storywriting. Especially compared with the retarded kids that come onto this site.
