Survive the Day!

Written by magic / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested / 4.00 (1 ratings) (1)
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Calen
Calen		 Sep 16, 2009
Sorry, but the quality is lacking, there's very little humor, and there's tons of other stories on the site just like this.
On the plus side, your grammar in it doesn't suck like so many others do.
First of all, unless you're god or something, you don't normally get to choose what someone is going to do. If it's survive the day, then to make a story actually successful, you need to have a plot, not just random blow up or eat the alarm clock. Also, if you say in the story title (this is going to be funny) chances are it isn't. Most good jokes and comedies don't say that.
Does Jerry Seinfeld go up on stage and say "This is going to be funny?"
Anyway, too many unfinished ends, and all in all I don't see much effort.
Good luck next time.
by Calen on Sep 16, 2009

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