Pandemic 2: The land of the infected

Written by laco / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Date	Comment
Alexgamer	Jul 31, 2010	by Alexgamer on Jul 31, 2010
zaxoman	Sep 3, 2009	Okay, you have a good idea. You pretty much tell the same story from a different POV, and I like that. However, what I do not like is how linear it is and the way you write the story. You are good with ideas, but I would work on describing and using "big people" words a lot more often. Also, try to intrigue people with sudden pauses that give multiple choices, all of which lead them into thinking they made the right decision until BAM! they die. Work on it! However, I am somewhat proud that I allowed you to write a sequel. Keep up the good work. by zaxoman on Sep 3, 2009
apotheosis	Mar 9, 2009	Alright, I'll start you off with a 10. +1 because I'm a big fan of zombie fiction +2 for using images throughout -2 for having a very linear plot -3 for writing on a 4th grade level -3 for atrocious spelling and grammar, I 'm not a stickler for these sorts of things, but it was really bad and just a simple spell check could've fixed it. I by apotheosis on Mar 9, 2009
Dan2	Feb 16, 2009	Nice pics tho by Dan2 on Feb 16, 2009