a random story about a cat named sparky

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Author Rating Date Comment
demyxroxs123
demyxroxs123
Feb 11, 2009
by demyxroxs123 on Feb 11, 2009
Calen
Calen
Nov 2, 2008
Beginning rating: 10
-8 for grammar
+3 for the hunger/thirst/etc. bar
+1 for interesting idea
-1 for the fact that you can't befriend the dog D:
-3 for short rooms without much plot
Final rating: 2

Get better grammar and try again, and that'd boost your rating a bit. More plot and more development as well.
by Calen on Nov 2, 2008

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