Comments & Ratings
Not bad...A simple read, though lacking in description this could become something satisfying. I don't see how this could be in the Romance section, but then, nobody does, it's unfinished, undernourished, growth is a necessity. |
I can't really say much because..Even after all this time, I haven't written anything. I'm nothing but a lost, bitter critic, striving to find something to contribute to, that or find someway to write my own little CYOA, countless (or not) times have I taken the time and effort to write my own, but they turn out completely useless. I have nothing to add to it and it turns out like the scum seen all over this site. Anyway, continue your little Vampire story!
|Bit linear in places, but a worthy addition to the romance selection.|
|Not all that bad, actually. I think you are lacking a lot with discription and it seems like you rushed yourself a lot in a few places. One of the more difficult things about writing (at least for me) is skipping details in order to further the plot. Coming back to it doesn't always work.|
|It's awesome! Just keep writing!!!!|
|Good writing so far but not finished. I don't think there's any way to reach any kind of end yet. But so far it looks promising.|