A day

Written by Leah1597 / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested / 4.00 (1 ratings) (1)
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TheCandyMan
TheCandyMan		 Apr 4, 2012
Yeah, this should be the last review I'll ever do on this site, might aswell make it last with something..Positive, me reviewing a story, when I'm somewhat unsuccessful myself might seem hypocritical, but you did ask for it, so hey.

You should keep in mind that some people out there are pretty intolerant of people that don't start their sentences with a capital letter. The story should be made up of paragraphs and be decriptive, (that being, EXPLAIN everything that your character notices, sees, smells, feels - -physically and emotionally).

So making a story made up of one or two sentences a page...It's a problem. You won't be very popular among people here if they don't see your potential.

Good luck in future writing. Hopefully if you haven't given up like [i]some[/i] people. Right?
by TheCandyMan on Apr 4, 2012

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