Pokemon savior (Pt.1 Distress)

Written by Adamented / G: General Audiences / 4.50 (4 ratings) (4)
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Author Rating Date Comment
KingMalice
KingMalice		 Dec 30, 2009
by KingMalice on Dec 30, 2009
vancelandow
vancelandow		 Feb 28, 2009
by vancelandow on Feb 28, 2009
DSDude999
DSDude999		 Jun 2, 2008
dude, THIS SUCKS!
by DSDude999 on Jun 2, 2008
Calen
Calen		 Jun 1, 2008
There's only one way the story could go, considering there IS a part 2, but I would have liked to see more choices. Some bad grammar, but it was a good read so you earn a 6. Next time: Longer descriptions, more choices, don't do a room with choices just for the hell of it where only one leads to the next room (hella annoying) and Pokemon stories are VERY hard to accomplish given the gameplay. The only way I could ever rate a Pokemon game theme story higher than a 6 is if the person put hours of work into it and made it like the game. Then again, the game will always have more choices, so not much need.

If you're focusing more on plot, elaborate the characters and story- battles just waste time, so cut down on those, otherwise you'll be left with a million loose ends if you want the story to be halfway decent.

Still, a good effort for a Pokemon story, one of the best I've seen so far.

Lots of room for improvement, but I think you can do it.
by Calen on Jun 1, 2008

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