Trapped!

Written by zaxoman / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
Zac6251		Jun 30, 2011	Makes no sense. Like after you do the whole machete thing, how can you run or walk towards a door when you have a stump for a leg, doesn't even say how you can walk. At first it kinda has a story, then after that it's just random. by Zac6251 on Jun 30, 2011
TheCandyMan		Jun 20, 2011	Yeah, I agree with Calen's review. And it did lack the description it perhaps should have had, so you look up at the glass roof, and now suddenly there's a rope that isn't even connected to anything? You should take off the 'Room Review' too, so other members have the ability to finish this off. Good work, has great potential, but your work could possibly be improved. by TheCandyMan on Jun 20, 2011
KingMalice		May 9, 2010	I thought this was pretty cool I'm a huge fan of the torture genre. Keep up the good work by KingMalice on May 9, 2010
Vesnicie		Apr 12, 2008	Yeah it's sort of arbitrary, but then again so are most things in life. No points off for that, really. Well-written, could use even more description, but then again so could everything. Best thing to come around as of late, but then again I might be dreaming. by Vesnicie on Apr 12, 2008
Calen		Apr 9, 2008	So, basically, it's a Saw parody? This story WOULD have gotten a 7-10. The only problem is it is not based on skill, but on luck. Some of the rooms didn't make much sense, and I failed to see why pulling the rope killed you while waiting and pulling it spared you. Grammar got you to a 6, but lack of a good storyline, luck-based choices and a commonly used idea prevented you from getting any higher. You've got potential, though. Maybe refine this or start a new one and work on that. by Calen on Apr 9, 2008