zombie inferno

Written by theone3150 / G: General Audiences /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
razman		Oct 20, 2007	okay, i must admit, my zombie story isn't much better, but this is full of 'one liners'. The choices are pretty bad to put it nicely. 'Believe him' is a pathetic option. There is really no point in giving the choice in that case. I think it was just an excuse to add a room. Speaking of which, there aren't enough of them. The punctuality is also quite poor. I am not a great author, I am still in school, but this needs sorting out in many departments. I suggest making the story private and doing some more work on it. Good Luck. -razman- by razman on Oct 20, 2007
Calen		Oct 10, 2007	4, and I'm being very, VERY generous. It has potential, but you need to work on spelling and grammar, and, well, everything. by Calen on Oct 10, 2007