Cops and robbers

Written by joe60 / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Date	Comment
Juju123	Jun 1, 2021	It's pretty good. It is very short and direct. I think it's fun, but the grammar and spelling definitely need work. by Juju123 on Jun 1, 2021
TheCandyMan	Apr 4, 2011	That wasI understand you must be pretty young, but that was a little too short.. and the description and grammar and blah isn't good enough for me! :\| by TheCandyMan on Apr 4, 2011
happyhak	Dec 14, 2010	by happyhak on Dec 14, 2010
Souvarine	Oct 28, 2010	My main beef with this story is the lack of punctuation and the abundance of typos. I recommend editing those out. Can't comment too much on the material other than that; I got lost trying to read it. by Souvarine on Oct 28, 2010
Loki	Aug 21, 2010	It's pretty good for a first story, about as good as my first story anyways. I'm working on my second now. Anyways perhaps you should fix some of the typos but other than that good job. by Loki on Aug 21, 2010
superjo16	Jul 10, 2010	hey, this story is alright, but it was kind of short. make it longer and put at least a little bit on punctuation. i got kind of lost trying to read it. =) by superjo16 on Jul 10, 2010
cappstv	Jan 21, 2010	you capitalize less words then me. that is not good. by cappstv on Jan 21, 2010
cappstv	Jan 21, 2010	by cappstv on Jan 21, 2010
kingcjust	Dec 15, 2009	a little more detail and thought. by kingcjust on Dec 15, 2009
Dewper	Apr 21, 2009	Not great. A lot of typos make it hard to read. Keep working. Try to be less anoying. by Dewper on Apr 21, 2009
Megamantn	Jan 10, 2009	Crappy... by Megamantn on Jan 10, 2009
Biasatti	Dec 16, 2008	make it longer. it was really gay endings by Biasatti on Dec 16, 2008
Ghizzard	May 5, 2008	Too short for my liking and the cop one didn't make sense. Not too shabby though just needs some work. by Ghizzard on May 5, 2008
Ghizzard	May 5, 2008	by Ghizzard on May 5, 2008
trollitrade	Apr 13, 2008	Oh no, I got shot in the head by my own squadron! xD Why does this always happen to me in these adventure stories? I don't think I've ever gotten out of one without dying a weird death, lol. It was nice, easy, and didn't take a lot of brainwork. I wouldn't say it was super good, but it was kind of fun since I didn't feel like reading a lot this evening. ^_^ by trollitrade on Apr 13, 2008
Leblanc4prez	Oct 12, 2007	I feel buzzed right now... this rating is a present of somekind. by Leblanc4prez on Oct 12, 2007
donteatpoop	Jul 30, 2007	I don't. It needs a ton of work. -DEP by donteatpoop on Jul 30, 2007
apotheosis	Jul 30, 2007	The only reason this isn't a two or a one is because you had the disclaimer that it was your first story and I'm assuming you are very young. Learn some basic spelling and grammar. Study what "plot" is and work on that a bit. Yeah, needs a lot of work. Next story, spend a lot more time and write it in a word processing program and run a spelling and grammar check... please. by apotheosis on Jul 30, 2007
Calen	Jul 27, 2007	This story HAD potential. Playing the part of a cop who chases a robber or the actual robber. With paragraphs and character development, it could have become a good story. Unfortunately, it was far too simple and you misspelled you're a million times. by Calen on Jul 27, 2007
donteatpoop	Jul 26, 2007	I know that second grade can be difficult, so I'll kindly remind you that the first letter in a sentence should be capitalized (you know, BIG LETTERS). Your 'story' lacks depth. I know you said you put a lot of work into it, but it seems like you neglected to work on the storyline. by donteatpoop on Jul 26, 2007
joe60	Jul 26, 2007	Hi does anybody like my story? i do! by joe60 on Jul 26, 2007

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