Siege!

Written by apotheosis / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
Mudkipper6		Oct 11, 2019	Lol i didnt read it by Mudkipper6 on Oct 11, 2019
vegabond213		Jul 23, 2010	by vegabond213 on Jul 23, 2010
michaelrayholt		Jun 27, 2007	It's not so much the every-now-and-then spelling and grammar errors that bring about this rating, but rather your horrific lack of knowledge of castle construction and siege warfare. There never has been nor will there ever be enough metal from meteoritic material fallen on the entire Earth (let alone just a singular province) to construct an entire fortress from it. There's not been enough to even COAT a fortress's WALLS with it. Having so little actual material available, it's too severe a suspension of disbelief to ask of the reader. Also, in addition to other forms of siege warfare, most likely all THREE attack methods you mention in the crusader campaign would have been used SIMULTANEOUSLY. To suggest otherwise is laughably ludicrous. If you NEED input of a medieval nature, Apoth, you KNOW that you can come to me. (The English Master just also happens to be the resident medieval expert.) You're better than this, unless I remember incorrectly. by michaelrayholt on Jun 27, 2007
Vesnicie		Jun 17, 2007	This is generally well-written and has a highly structured plot. However, this story lacks any sort of character development or variation in narrative delivery (e.g., it has little or no dialogue), which made it very difficult for me to stay interested. Apoth, I really think you can do better than this. I'd also suggest leaving behind your faith vs. religion shtick, because you've really run it into the ground and your point of view on it is monotonously single-sided. by Vesnicie on Jun 17, 2007
Leblanc4prez		Jun 17, 2007	HOOOOOORAY! by Leblanc4prez on Jun 17, 2007