Pokemon Mystery Dungeon Red

Written by vanillafire / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested / 4.50 (4 ratings) (4)
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Lackofmop
Lackofmop		 Jul 5, 2013
Meh. Kind of funny, I guess.
by Lackofmop on Jul 5, 2013
Adamented
Adamented		 Jul 29, 2007
Could you plz preety plz continue?
by Adamented on Jul 29, 2007
SnapSunny
SnapSunny		 Jun 13, 2007
You certainly have potential. Try using it on something original, rather than a game someone else created. Also, try using just one character, ya know? Having five characters to choose from is a bad idea, trust me, i've done it before and I was never ever able to write anything complete because of all the choices I had to offer, and all the dead ends that came from it.
by SnapSunny on Jun 13, 2007
apotheosis
apotheosis		 Jun 1, 2007
This story branches off way to quickly so that it creates an overwhelming amount of loose ends that will never be filled. I suggest cutting down on the amount of choices and focusing on only a couple of primary story paths. Still, better than a lot of the other pokemon stories on this site.
by apotheosis on Jun 1, 2007
razman
razman		 May 25, 2007
I don't particularly like pokemon, but this one isn't too bad. I quite like the play style story side of it, but it could do with a bit less 'lame journey' and a bit more 'kick-ass, swearing characters' parts. More rooms are needed to, but other than that, keep up the work.
by razman on May 25, 2007

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