Comments & Ratings
||Sep 7, 2011||Random death scenes are neither funny, nor necessary..It's just plain awful..|
||Sep 25, 2008||i loved it!!! it was so funny!!! excpecially he he he she forgot about doughnuts! MUM: And no doughnuts YOU: DOH!|
||Jun 1, 2007||:(|
||May 4, 2007||This story is quite funny at times but annoying at others. You need to work a LOT more on your writing but I'm going to give you a break and up your rating of this story a tiny bit. You should make a few better endings and elaborate more, though.|
||May 2, 2007||I've seen better stories written on my penis. And that says alot, since I only have 2 1/2 inches to work with.|
||May 1, 2007||
Are you really an 11-year-old Italian? Then I suppose I should give you points for youth and ESL. |
However, this IS the internet after all and you may just be full of it.
The rooms are too short and you're another one who falls victim to thinking that out-of-context randomness is really funny. You see, in the right situation, I might find it highly amusing that I can't brush my teeth because I'm wearing boxer shorts (well, actually, I wouldn't be caught dead in boxer shorts). However, simply filling space with something silly like this and then making it the End of the story for no apparent reason just irritates me.
Try to work on coherence and grammar.
||Apr 29, 2007|