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Written by ruffriderno / R: Restricted - Adult / 4.00 (3 ratings) (3)
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apotheosis
apotheosis		 Jun 1, 2007
Needs work. Look at the high rated stories on this site to see how it is done.
by apotheosis on Jun 1, 2007
donteatpoop
donteatpoop		 May 2, 2007
Here's the thing, if you are going to write "action/adventure", don't try to be funny. A kid eating his boogers would be fine in a humorous story, but it jest detracts from the adventureous mood you were apparently trying to create.
by donteatpoop on May 2, 2007
Calen
Calen		 Apr 18, 2007
It has potential, that's for sure. But you need a few things. Grammar is one. Also you should really make a story you can handle finishing. I had that mistake myself- but my story was much more vast and had grammar so I got a good rating. Try again, you have potential if you use it.
by Calen on Apr 18, 2007

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