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The Spartans

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Author Rating Date Comment
Leftytwo
Leftytwo
Sep 11, 2015
Really good story, no loose ends and readable grammar (not perfect, but hey, compared to some other stories this ones OK). I like the plot too.
by Leftytwo on Sep 11, 2015
Thickskullman
Thickskullman
Jun 28, 2013
by Thickskullman on Jun 28, 2013
silentninja
silentninja
May 3, 2010
Reminds me of 300!
by silentninja on May 3, 2010
urnam0
urnam0
Mar 21, 2009
Eight for a nice little story. There wasn't really any clues or reason why some actions resulted in death so I would like to see that corrected
by urnam0 on Mar 21, 2009
Bigbadmonkey
Bigbadmonkey
Feb 6, 2009
THIS IS SPARTA
by Bigbadmonkey on Feb 6, 2009
Adamented
Adamented
Jun 3, 2008
10 this was a very great story!
Good job! I hope you keep up the good work!
by Adamented on Jun 3, 2008
apotheosis
apotheosis
Mar 6, 2007
Here is how I broke it down.

Started you off with a 10.

-1 Grammar Errors
-1 Historical Inaccuracies
-1 Tried to make the Spartans seem heterosexual (they were known to promote homosexuality to increase companionship and therefore the will to fight on the battlefield)
-1 Slightly cliche'd with that movie coming out and all.

+1 Great first effort
+1 While I said there are historical inaccuracies you did label this as fantasy so I should give you a point back...

And it is an 8.
by apotheosis on Mar 6, 2007
donteatpoop
donteatpoop
Feb 28, 2007
I almost gave this a 9.

Good story, excellent writing, truly an amazing first effort for the site. I can't wait to see what else springs forth from you.

Why didn't I give you a 10? Spelling is off in several places.

Why didn't I give you a 9? There is no possible outcome beyond two rooms of reading if the reader does not choose to talk to the girl. While stream lining is sometimes necessary, it should not be as heavy as this.
by donteatpoop on Feb 28, 2007

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