Bob's Life

Written by findluke / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
Thickskullman		May 15, 2013	Very nice, fineluke. Wish you had finished this one. by Thickskullman on May 15, 2013
Clark		Mar 6, 2013	by Clark on Mar 6, 2013
TheCandyMan		Apr 16, 2011	I really enjoyed, it, it's well set and not one of those too-detailed stories, or misunderstood, it's clear, clever and deserves high ratings. :) 8/10 by TheCandyMan on Apr 16, 2011
ectoBiologist		Apr 15, 2011	by ectoBiologist on Apr 15, 2011
KingMalice		Jun 1, 2010	It was pretty funny by KingMalice on Jun 1, 2010
magic		Jul 25, 2009	When does that happen to babies?! I still love it. Great job, findluke. by magic on Jul 25, 2009
coolguy		May 10, 2009	I was laughing like heck at this story!! It's hilarious!!! by coolguy on May 10, 2009
Leah1597		Sep 25, 2008	i can't get to the end!!! help! by Leah1597 on Sep 25, 2008
Leah1597		Sep 25, 2008	i can't get to the end!!! by Leah1597 on Sep 25, 2008
Dan2		Nov 14, 2007	Wow, Bob has quite the life doesn't he. by Dan2 on Nov 14, 2007
Leblanc4prez		May 27, 2007	OMG MF oh wait... i hate leet.. sorry! by Leblanc4prez on May 27, 2007
gojo345		Jan 9, 2007	Awesome story, the beginning sequences are kept short with more choices. I like that. by gojo345 on Jan 9, 2007
apotheosis		Jan 7, 2007	I really like what you have going here. I don't mind that there isn't much description, I can see that it is your style but I like the way the story flows. It moves at a quick pace and is very easy to follow, good if you do not want to do much thinking. But, if you really want to use this style throughout you need A LOT of rooms to compensate. This is why I cannot give it higher than a seven. Make some major additions and I will reconsider. by apotheosis on Jan 7, 2007
donteatpoop		Jan 6, 2007	The concept you have hear is a good one. Starting out young and growing older through the eyes of Bob. However, the descriptions you give are rather short and limited. I recommend editing in some adjectives and additional bits of description. Also, by five choices deep the reader shouldn't still be making decisions that take place in the delivery room. At that pace the reader will quickly lose interest. Not only that but you'll be working on writing this thing forever. by donteatpoop on Jan 6, 2007