Dropped

Written by Coquiton / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
apotheosis		Jan 14, 2007	I know this is a cop-out but I have to say DEP summed it up pretty well. by apotheosis on Jan 14, 2007
donteatpoop		Jan 11, 2007	The writing is incredible, well thought out and described beautifully. You have a great deal of talent. Thank you for writing this story. I was so close to giving you a ten, but I had to restrain myself. Why? Some of the "endings" aren't really endings. I mean, they end, but without any closure. For instance, after parachuting to the ground and running to the bushes and into the woods, I locate a team and join them as they head towards marker C. ... The End. I know, I know, "the ending is left open to the imagination of the reader, thus provoking more thought", or whatever artsy-fartsy excuse you offer. I would take the same defense. BUUUUUUUT, in a story about the war and specifically about this battle, the story can't just be "You parachute, you land, you find a team." I think this would be an excellent opportunity for you to expand a little by writing a bit more about "YOU" and the team you found, develope some characters and what-not. Anyway, I gave it a 9 because it was an excellent read. Nice job. Hope you stick around and produce more great stuf. by donteatpoop on Jan 11, 2007