Bad Day in Hell

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Very well written. Sharp and engaging. Great characterisation and descriptions without being overladen, perfect for a CYOA. Nice storyline and setting. Pity it's a bit short. Where's part 2?
by Thickskullman on Jun 29, 2013
It was good, but wut happened to the girl nina?
by me6031 on Jul 24, 2011
hopefully the second one will come out soon!
by mechano1 on Jan 12, 2009
Eight thumbs up!
by Leblanc4prez on Jun 19, 2007
i like
by gadz00k on Mar 14, 2007
I have to say that this story really cught me :D I can't wait for the next :D :D!
by kamigawa on Mar 14, 2007
I feel this story does a good job of making the reader care about what choice they should make.
by Marz on Mar 2, 2007
Awesome first story, intense action, good dialogue...

If you had more description you would've gotten a 9.
by jeffisthebest on Dec 20, 2006
Very very well written, I enjoyed it a lot. I look foward to the next installment. A more detailed plot would have made it a 10.
by apotheosis on Dec 20, 2006
Really sharp and well-written, not to mention the ever-humorous Sarge. He reminded me a lot of the guy from Fullmetal Jacket...

For some reason, the story didn't quite hold my attention as much as it could have. Perhaps some more narrative "padding" would be helpful.

Great job, though!
by Vesnicie on Dec 16, 2006
I like it! It's a bit linear, and it's sorta disappointing that none of your interactions with Sarge have a major impact on the storyline.

Still, it's well written, and though it's perhaps a bit stereotypical in the character choice, it's still fun to read.

And the killing spree plotline, though entirely pointless and seemingly spurred from nothing, was awesome.
by Usoki on Dec 15, 2006

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