Comments & Ratings
|Very well written. Sharp and engaging. Great characterisation and descriptions without being overladen, perfect for a CYOA. Nice storyline and setting. Pity it's a bit short. Where's part 2?|
|It was good, but wut happened to the girl nina?|
|hopefully the second one will come out soon!|
|Eight thumbs up!|
|I have to say that this story really cught me :D I can't wait for the next :D :D!|
|I feel this story does a good job of making the reader care about what choice they should make.|
Awesome first story, intense action, good dialogue...|
If you had more description you would've gotten a 9.
|Very very well written, I enjoyed it a lot. I look foward to the next installment. A more detailed plot would have made it a 10.|
Really sharp and well-written, not to mention the ever-humorous Sarge. He reminded me a lot of the guy from Fullmetal Jacket...|
For some reason, the story didn't quite hold my attention as much as it could have. Perhaps some more narrative "padding" would be helpful.
Great job, though!
I like it! It's a bit linear, and it's sorta disappointing that none of your interactions with Sarge have a major impact on the storyline.|
Still, it's well written, and though it's perhaps a bit stereotypical in the character choice, it's still fun to read.
And the killing spree plotline, though entirely pointless and seemingly spurred from nothing, was awesome.