Mysterious Wonder

Written by Calen / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Date	Comment
Thickskullman	Jun 8, 2013	by Thickskullman on Jun 8, 2013
Leblanc4prez	Jun 19, 2007	I am the Queen of France! by Leblanc4prez on Jun 19, 2007
jeffisthebest	Dec 20, 2006	I liked it, well-written and with some good choices, although many were perhaps overly mundane. It was a good idea. by jeffisthebest on Dec 20, 2006
apotheosis	Dec 11, 2006	First and foremost I must state a fatal flaw within your story: It branches off far to quickly and I think you will have a difficult time making it self contained. You have the beginnings of a very good story but unless you start merging many plotlines together fast it is going to branch off to quickly for you to ever finish. That said, I thought your writing style was good, not to much description, not to little, it was a good light popcorn reading. It was semi-original, and I can tell that there was certainly effort put into it. Unfortunately, it looks like it hasn't been added to for a few weeks and may be one of those abandon projects. Overall, I rate it a 7, decent but lacks potential for a good finished product. by apotheosis on Dec 11, 2006
Wick	Nov 22, 2006	Amazing! by Wick on Nov 22, 2006