Poke-knights adventure

Written by grassybulb / G: General Audiences /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Date	Comment
apotheosis	Mar 22, 2007	This has 7.4 words per room. That is really pathetic. by apotheosis on Mar 22, 2007
robbyoo	Feb 21, 2007	by robbyoo on Feb 21, 2007
jeffisthebest	Dec 20, 2006	I give this a 1 because it had perhaps the most retarded ending I've ever seen: "You have everything you need!" by jeffisthebest on Dec 20, 2006
Usoki	Nov 25, 2006	by Usoki on Nov 25, 2006
apotheosis	Nov 19, 2006	Needs more description, more rooms, more effort, better grammar, a plot, and much much more. For example, there is an ability to have rooms loop back, so you don't need to put a message that says "Go back" and have it set as an end to the story. Instead, have the choice loop you back to the room. Don't make the reader put in more effort. I think most importantly, try to avoid having about 10 words per room, unless you are going to have an inordinate amount of rooms to compensate. It was better than some... so I give it a 2 rather than a 1. If you put in some more effort and clear the ratings I will re-evaluate it. by apotheosis on Nov 19, 2006