Gryphons in Greenden

Written by thechief / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Date	Comment
Crefix	Nov 29, 2010	by Crefix on Nov 29, 2010
Thiefswipe	Jan 4, 2008	by Thiefswipe on Jan 4, 2008
donteatpoop	Aug 1, 2007	There were only two things in your story that I feel should be critiqued. 1.) When writing a story that takes place in a historic-like setting, you should try to avoid modern terms such as "no dice" "dickhead" and "okay". It takes away from the believability of the story. 2.) Try to give some physical description of the characters. The background information you supplied was great, but what do these people look like? Not only will this help to make your story more easy to visualize, but it will also allow you to avoid using their names so much in your writing. That aside, I liked the story. It was an entertaining read, and I wanted to keep reading more (so you didn't bore me at all). by donteatpoop on Aug 1, 2007
Leblanc4prez	May 20, 2007	It was wonderbar! by Leblanc4prez on May 20, 2007
spartan008	Feb 27, 2007	by spartan008 on Feb 27, 2007
apotheosis	Feb 12, 2007	I enjoyed what you have done of the story so far very much. I did not notice any real errors, it wasn't to wordy but it wasn't skimpy either. A good balanced fun adventure. I would normally give it a 9, but I'm feeling generous today and it was a nice escape from schoolwork so I'll give it a 10. Please finish it! by apotheosis on Feb 12, 2007