Escape The Fast Approaching Wave Of McDonald's Tartar Sauce

Written by idbeholda / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
china		Jul 7, 2019	ist shit dont read by china on Jul 7, 2019
ChubbyTeletubby		Jun 7, 2009	Hmmmm. Wasn't bad, wasn't great. As much as I am a fan of random stories, this one just didn't do it for me. Sorry. I'm sixin' ya, dude. You got sixed. Cause I'm a six, six bastard. Oh, and I HATE McDonald's tartar sauce! That's not why I gave you a six though. I gave you a six because I could. Got it? Ya, see? That's right. I do what I want, cause I got moxy, see? That was supposed to be my impression of a 1930s gangster. I messed up. Blew it again! by ChubbyTeletubby on Jun 7, 2009
theone3150		Mar 12, 2009	by theone3150 on Mar 12, 2009
westernjesta		Oct 29, 2007	This story, to me, is a bunch of random humor that at times add nothing to the already random story and I really enjoyed what I read. Like DEP said it could have had a serious aspect to it. I would have liked to see that. Still, without that, great story. 8/10 by westernjesta on Oct 29, 2007
donteatpoop		Oct 6, 2007	Wow. Normally I'm not a fan of randomness, but this story was genuinely amusing. The very premis, that tartar sauce is flooding the streets, was hilarious. Great work. The only way this could have been better is if there was an element of seriousness to it. For instance, a protagonist who is not encountering a bunch of random crazy things, who is just trying to survive the tartar sauce flood, would make this even better. Why? Because slapstick rarely works, especially in writing. There needs to be a "straight man", like an Abbot to Costello. Personally, an "adventure" on this humorous storyline would make it much funnier (partly BECAUSE it is serious when something so foolish is happening) and much more engaging. But either way, great contribution to the site, glad you took it off of Mature (otherwise I never would have read it). by donteatpoop on Oct 6, 2007
Leblanc4prez		Aug 26, 2007	Argggh! The sauce, the sauce! Great work bro! by Leblanc4prez on Aug 26, 2007
apotheosis		Jun 5, 2007	First off, change the rating of this story from MA to PG or R because that way it will get seen my more people. Also, it does not have any "mature" content. Secondly, I found the idea of a fast approaching wave of tartar sauce very amusing though I wish you had done more with it. Please continue adding to the story and developing it more. What you do have is funny, creative and has proper grammar. Normally I'd give it a 7 but I'm giving it an 8 because of its potential. by apotheosis on Jun 5, 2007