The Hell Of Social Interactions

Written by garypryke / MA: Mature Audiences - Adult / 4.67 (6 ratings) (6)
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MrDemonCat
MrDemonCat		 Dec 29, 2019
*Sad demon noises* I want a whole story! :(
by MrDemonCat on Dec 29, 2019
donteatpoop
donteatpoop		 May 19, 2012
I understand that you're trying to step outside the norm and avoid certain genres but literature is not a genre.
by donteatpoop on May 19, 2012
Dewper
Dewper		 May 1, 2009
by Dewper on May 1, 2009
Leblanc4prez
Leblanc4prez		 Aug 7, 2006
Very funny. Leblanc liked the BBQ bit and Cyclon liked the slutty girl!
by Leblanc4prez on Aug 7, 2006
apotheosis
apotheosis		 Aug 2, 2006
I agree with Usoki. It needs more effort essentially. The biggest issue is it branches off way to quickly to way to many possibilities. Perhaps that is what you are going for though, sort of an Another Monday Morning effect. A stronger beginning would probably have been helpful, it doesn't need to be text heavy but could use a few literary devices. I'll give it a six because it has potential.
by apotheosis on Aug 2, 2006
Usoki
Usoki		 Aug 1, 2006
This...is kinda pathetic. There's nothing here. If you were to take this story out of it's CYOA format, you wouldn't even fill up a page. It's a story about a party, and I didn't even get there until five rooms in, because you made up so many ways to get to it!

Your grammar's better than I thought it'd be...but the fact that most of your rooms are little more than a sentence is pathetic.
by Usoki on Aug 1, 2006

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