Comments & Ratings
|i dont know why many people didnt like it...for me,,,it did take my attention...good story|
|Quite nice. I like The Idea. Vamps rule!|
This is the third story you've put out and all of them share the same qualitie; short rooms with very little desription. It's really disappointing, man. Most people learn the more they write, and in reading the comments on your previous stories, I can't help but notice how blatantly clear the message as to what your stories problem's are. You need to describe things in stories. These are not "First Reader" stories geared towards people just learning to read (or are they?). They are supposed to be stories. Just try a little.|
This story, as oposed to your other two, actually seems like it could have potential, but again; in order to make a good story you have to actually use some words.
|I just love how you have 1-3 sentences per room!|