It's just another day?

Written by wilio / MA: Mature Audiences - Adult / 4.50 (2 ratings) (2)
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GuiltyGearX
GuiltyGearX		 Dec 13, 2006
Other than the fact that you can't really spell. This was good. I just wish that you would've explained the story a little more. The man that owned the house, you never followed up on. And by the way. If someone has NO head. They can't talk. So, that little girl couldn't have said "Kill" or anything else for that matter. Sorry, but thats just how it is.
by GuiltyGearX on Dec 13, 2006
jeffisthebest
jeffisthebest		 May 9, 2006
Hmm it is original, but otherwise not so good.

And please, for the love of Allah, capitalize your stories' names.
by jeffisthebest on May 9, 2006
YazZMaN
YazZMaN		 Apr 18, 2006
Not enlightening, not funny, not worth glancing at.

This story constantly changes from past to present tense and has spelling errors up the arse. Also, there is a beautiful and nonexistant plotline.

Man, you just need to give it effort is all. I've wrote some pathetic shit in my day, I tell you what. My advise is to re-do this story all together. Just add some detail and fix all of your errors. Aim for a 7, my man, aim for a 7.
by YazZMaN on Apr 18, 2006

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