Firstly..The writing of this story wasn't exactly interesting. Rather it's what I'd expect from a 12 year old. It's rather dull and there are a few/couple of spelling mistakes, which I assume is the result of lacking effort. Now secondly, this is unfinished. One page. One point. I only gave this a 2 because it has potential to develop into something that flows well, despite the fact that your writing style doesn't exactly give me the impression that it could ever possibly become something that I'll even enjoy a little to read. I won't bother lecture you/anyone reading this on how to make a story look good. I mean; I know I'm not exactly the best writer on this site, but I'm certaintly not the worst.
