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Black Orchid
Written by
CaptainJack
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G: General Audiences
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apotheosis
Jun 27, 2007
I would have liked you to reveal what is going on more in the beginning, give more of an intro or at least add description as time goes on so the reader knows what the heck is happening.
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apotheosis
on Jun 27, 2007
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